Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In
this
contemporary world , some universities
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university
students
they
want to learn additional Correct pronoun usage
apply
subject
to their main studies Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
while
other argues that more time should spend
on studying for a qualification. Wrong verb form
be spent
This
essay will acknowledge the validity of this
statement and elaborates
on my reason.
On one hand, it is believed by Correct subject-verb agreement
elaborate
students
that learning optional subjects to their main course will give ample
knowledge about Correct pronoun usage
them ample
other area
of the field . Change the wording
another area
other areas
In addition
to that, the
basic information is needed in our daily life which makes it easy to learn and teach to others .Correct article usage
apply
For example
,when you are doing major
in Correct article usage
a major
the
science ,Correct article usage
apply
when
you Rephrase
apply
added
English and Accounting which helps to improve communication skills , Wrong verb form
add
presentation
skills ,Correct word choice
and presentation
where as
accounting gives basic accounting, Correct your spelling
whereas
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and calculation
calculation
in our daily Fix the agreement mistake
calculations
life
.
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lives
On the other hand
,significant
amount of time Add an article
a significant
spending
on studying for qualification will make you expertise in that particular field . Science Change the form of the verb
spent
students
spend enough time on
doing different kinds of experiments and learning formulas to Change preposition
apply
applied
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apply
on
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to
it
. More Correct pronoun usage
them
over
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apply
this
will makes
the Change the verb form
make
students
acquire more information instead
of focusing on other subject
. For Change the wording
another subject
other subjects
instances
,if a person Fix the agreement mistake
instance
choose
accounting as Change the verb form
chooses
main
subject , he should focus on doing Add an article
the main
a main
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a bachelors
bachelors
in Accounting and Change noun form
bachelor's
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a Masters
Masters
in accounting which enables them to become specialised in charted accounting.
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Master
To sum up
, following the perusal of both views doing additional course
will help to acquire and explore Fix the agreement mistake
courses
other field
.It is Change the wording
another field
other fields
lucid
that specialised in Correct word choice
clear
single
course will have better employment opportunities and growth.Add an article
a single
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