these days much of the foods people eat gets transported from farms that are thousannds of miles away. some people believe that it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consume food produced by local farmers. would the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?
Nowadays,
the
most Correct article usage
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people
should to
consume Change the verb form
apply
a
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apply
import
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imported
food
from overseas instead
of a
local Remove the article
apply
food
while
other people
think that people
should to
select Change the verb form
apply
a
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apply
food
which produced by farmers
in the country to protect environment
and economy. Correct article usage
the environment
From
my opinion, Change the preposition
In
consumption
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the consumption
an
ingredient by Change preposition
of an
a local
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local farmers
a local farmer
farmers
has
versatile and it Verb problem
is
is
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apply
depened
on Correct your spelling
depends
a
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the
food
which people
choose to bring for cooking.
On the one hand, a
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food
which transported
from other country has several Add a missing verb
is transported
food
on the market but the price is higher than local products. Change to a plural noun
foods
For instance
, when transport from a long distance as a result
of the cost of goods much
more expensive and Add a missing verb
is much
quality
of Correct article usage
the quality
product
may be dropped because it Add an article
the product
a product
take
a long time to Change the verb form
takes
shipping
. Change the verb form
ship
Moreover
, if importing food
will raise from the past, it may affect to
the Change preposition
apply
evironment
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environment
especially
air pollution from Add the comma(s)
, especially
emission
from vehicles that Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
use
for transportation.
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are used
In addition
, people
should to
encourage products from Fix the infinitive
apply
a local
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local farmers
a local farmer
farmers
for
help Change preposition
to
argriculturist
has revenue and reduced using Correct your spelling
agriculturist
agriculturists
agriculturalist
product
from international Fix the agreement mistake
products
food
as a result
of the economic will be grow
up Change the verb form
grow
due to
the
most Correct article usage
apply
of
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apply
citizen
interested in products from Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
a
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an
argriculturist
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agriculturist
agriculturists
agriculturalist
such
as organic vegetables and good qualities.
In conclusion, I think the advantages of local food
has
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apply
outweight
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outweigh
outweighed
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
both
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in both
of
protecting Change preposition
in
environment
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the environment
particulary
transportation and supporting Correct your spelling
particularly
farmers
in the country in economic
aspect.Correct article usage
an economic
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