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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comaprisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comaprisions where relevant.
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, the given table
reflected
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 the
orgins
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origins
organs
 and the financial expenses of the United Kingdom (UK)'s police officers in 2017-2018. There was a slight increase in all the aspects included, reaching 318.6
pounds
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million
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 in total in 2018, higher
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then
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 304.7
pounds
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million
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 in 2017 for around 14
pounds
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million
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. The government from the state contributed to the highest proportion among
other
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 three categories,
account
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accounting
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 for almost 178
pounds
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million
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 in 2018, 0.3
million
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pounds
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 higher than in 2017. For the pie charts, there was a higher need for
the
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apply
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technology expenditure comparing 8% in 2017 but
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 raised 6% to 14% in 2018.
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, even
there
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 was an increase percentage on the technical usage, the largest proportion
in
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 money expenses remained, which was the salaries of policemen. At the same time,
infrastructures
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 expenses for buildings and transports were the same in two consecutive years,
account
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accounting
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 for 17%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pounds, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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