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The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.

The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
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The graph illustrates data about the
population
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 numbers for different kinds of turtles in India over
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a 32-years
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32-years
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32-year
in
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period.
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, there were 111
turtle
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species
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 in India and the 1980
turtle
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population
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index
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 considered 100
units
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 and in
this
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 year, all turtles in India were at unit 100.
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, over time, the leatherback
turtle
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’s number dropped significantly and reached
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only 60
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while
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 an opposite trend could be observed in the case of Olive Ridley turtles.
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species
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 continually expanded,
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 the
index
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, till 1997 and
then
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 showed some fluctuations with a sharp drop in 2012 when it was just over 120
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.
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, the green
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’s
index
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 indicates that a rapid oscillation was visible in the
population
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 of
this
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turtle
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. Over the years,
this
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species
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's
population
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,
however
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, slightly dropped and they were just over 90
units
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 in 2012. The
index
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 of all
turtle
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species
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 did not change significantly, though there were many ups and downs in
this
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 number.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, turtle, species, index, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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