The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
The graph illustrates data about the
population
numbers for different kinds of turtles in India over Correct article usage
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Overall
, there were 111 turtle
species
in India and the 1980 turtle
population
index
considered 100 units
and in this
year, all turtles in India were at unit 100. However
, over time, the leatherback turtle
’s number dropped significantly and reached to
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units
while
an opposite trend could be observed in the case of Olive Ridley turtles. This
species
continually expanded, according to
the index
, till 1997 and then
showed some fluctuations with a sharp drop in 2012 when it was just over 120 units
.
Finally
, the green turtle
’s index
indicates that a rapid oscillation was visible in the population
of this
turtle
. Over the years, this
species
's population
, however
, slightly dropped and they were just over 90 units
in 2012. The index
of all turtle
species
did not change significantly, though there were many ups and downs in this
number.Submitted by buyabuya201 on
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