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The line graph illustrates the proportion of total expenditure in a certain European country between 1960 and 2000.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of total expenditure in a certain European country between 1960 and 2000.
The chart presents 5 various spending categories in an exact European country during a period of 40
years
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, it is obvious that more types of expenditure (food, leisure, clothing, fuel/energy) had a downward trend,
whereas
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transport was the only figure that increased sharply over the
years
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. At the
begining
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beginning
 of the period, a significant decrease could be seen in
the
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food: it shrank from 34% in 1960 to below 14% in 2000.
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, there was a steady
reduce
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 in leisure and clothing, starting at 20% and 10% individually and falling
its
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 lowest point (10% and 5%)
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 of the year. Moving on to fuel/energy, there was the lowest proportion throughout the
years
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 which started from over 6% to almost 3%. In comparison, transport experienced a gradual growth during the
years
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. In 1960 its proportion was 10% and its peak was nearly 15% in 2000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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