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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »
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The given Pie
charis
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charts
 depict the
overall
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 distribution of
money
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 done by the
Scool
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school
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 in the UK in 1981, 1991 and 2001. As can be seen from the chart
that
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apply
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, the major spending of
money
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 was on teacher's salaries in all three years . meanwhile, spending
money
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 on insurance increased gradually.
According to
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 the chart
of
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for
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 1987,
money
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spent
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was spent
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 equally on Resources
as well as
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in
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on
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 furniture and equipment by 15%. Less
Proportion
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 was made on insurance by 2% .
However
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,
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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 Salaries were the
one
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ones
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 which had the highest
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Proportion
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proportion
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 of
money
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spending
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spent
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 followed by Other
workers
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worker's
workers'
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 salaries. The most
eyecathing
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eye-catching
eyecatching
 figure is, teacher's Sa'aries were taking almost 50% of Spending in 1992.
Whereas
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 furniture and equipment
Proportion
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 tumbled down drastically and reached 5%
..
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.
...
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 In 2001,
Speriding
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Spending
money
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 on insurance rose greatly by 8%. Meanwhile, Furniture and equipment
also
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 got around a quarter of
Proportion
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 in annual
money
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 spending.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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