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The image below shows the different stages involved in making olive oil.

#image #stages #oil
The given flowchart presents information about
the
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apply
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making olive
oil
.
Overall
, there are 6
steps
 in the process, beginning with olives and ending
at
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with
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 olive
oil
. As is given in the graph,
the first step is
 olives
in
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the next step is
 the mill, press, separation, olive
oil
 return and
produces
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produce
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 olive
oil
, which is the
last
 step in
this
 flowchart. In general, water is
factor
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a factor
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 affected in
this
steps
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step
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.
In addition
, time and manpower. are important elements that
has
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 a major influence
in
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on
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this
 process. After going through these
steps
 the cycle begins again and is repeated indefinitely.
To sum up
, it can clearly be seen that making olive
oil
 moves in normal
steps
,
although
 human factors may
also
 play a role in affecting the balance.
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coherence cohesion
Try to follow a clear, linear progression to describe processes. A step-by-step description makes it easier to follow.
task achievement
Introduce your description with a clear overview of the process before diving into details.
task achievement
Use specific language relevant to the process being described. For making olive oil, terms like 'harvesting', 'crushing', and 'extraction' are essential.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear purpose. One for introduction, one or more for the main body, describing the stages, and a conclusion if necessary.
task achievement
Provided an overall view at the beginning, which is good practice for process descriptions.
task achievement
Attempted to describe the stages involved in making olive oil, an essential part of task response.

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