The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
households
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in owned and rented
accommodation
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in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
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, It is remarkable that the percentage of families, who lived in rented
accomodation
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accommodation
, steadily decreased in the
peroid
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period
of 29 years,
whereas
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the percentage of
households
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in
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owned had
a
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opposite trend, which
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continuously decreased. To be specific,
households
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owning
accommodation
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accounted for 77% in 1918, which was the highest data in the figures.
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, the counterpart only stood at 22% approximately. By the following 2 years (1939 and 1953)
households
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remained stable both in rented and owned
accommodation
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, at 32% and 68% respectively. The gap between these two proportions narrowed before they equalled at 50% in 1971. After 1971, the
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of families owning
accommodation
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increased considerably to nearly 70% in 2001,
however
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, there was a significant decline in the
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figure
of people that rented
accommodation
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, with the percentage decreasing to around 30%.
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, the proportions in owned
accommodation
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witnessed a slight growth to around 36% in two areas,
while
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the relevant figure for owning
house
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houses
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dropped to about 65% in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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