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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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In
21
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 century people have a lot of resources, which
become to
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help with food extraction. That’s
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 grocery
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 become available for big citizens. I believe that person has
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hungry
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” connected with
products
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human
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have not large
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 access to foodstuff and they
think
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that
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“I buy much to eat now
while
 I have money”. It has to do with psychology. In
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several major wars
such
 as civil strife and
world war two
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. So
individual
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afraid
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 to be famished. There are several ways to solve
this
 problem. First of all,
man
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 should go to a psychologist, because they should work out psychological troubles.
The
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second,
society can learn to control
their wastes
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its waste
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. In the
third,
adult
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adults
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 should study
children
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 proper consumption since childhood.
In the
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 fourth, the Government need to build a plant for processing food waste into compost. Some countries already
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this
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 problem.
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, in South Korea and Japan sort garbage before future conversion.
Person
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, who does not sort the garbage well,
pay
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 heavy fines.
Also
, states put an expiration date on
products
 for
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more
then
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 three days. Supermarkets, that
has
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 expired
products
, give considerable taxes. Norway buys up rubbish from different countries. It has
waste
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a waste
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 recycling plant. In the production of
secondly
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products
, we save the resources of the planet. In conclusion, we can learn
spending
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 money and time
reasonable
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. In
this
way
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 society must respect the work of others and nature. After all, without proper care, nature will die.
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