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Task One: A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1) give contact details for when you are away 2) give instructions about how to care for your pet 3) describe other household duties Write at least 150 words. Y ou do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

#friend #house #pet #holiday #contact #instructions #care #household #duties #ou #addresses
ِDear Liza I thank you indeed for your kindness
considering
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 to be in my home and taking care of my dog
in
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during
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 the time that I'm abroad for the yearly summer vacations. As you know, during the whole year we're working hard, and there
is
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 merely summer holidays to spend some
times
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 quite close
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 the family.
This
 summer we have 3 weeks as holidays and the company has already arranged some guest houses in Austria,
Alpe
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the Alpe
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 mountains
which
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presence
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the presence
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 of any kind of pets
are
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 not allowed,
therefore
 I asked you to stay in my home taking care of Bell, our old and lovely dog, which wasn't possible to accompany us in
this
 travel. Anyhow, you already have my mobile phone, but if it
was'nt
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wasn't
 accessible, you can call
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reception
on
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at
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 +90-333-789807 and leave
the
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 message, the address of our residence here, is
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 mentioned
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 the footer of
this
 letter. Liza, please consider, that Bell (our dog I mean) is quite old - almost 18 years - and he is not able to bite and eat hard kinds of food anymore, so just prepare
mixture
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 of milk and bread and let him eat, or if he was asking for something different, go ahead with
minsed
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minced
 bones and meat, that'd be enough. You understand that 3 weeks is quite long and I'm worried about the cottage if there is heavy rain, even though you are so busy, please look after the roof too, if you
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 huge rain or twister, the rest of the house accessories are fine and there is nothing to be worried about. Best regards Abra
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structure
Use paragraphs to clearly separate different sections of your letter for better readability. While you have successfully divided the letter into sections, clearer paragraphing could enhance coherence.
style
Try to vary your sentence structures more to enhance the flow of your letter. While the sentences convey the message, a greater variety in structure could make your writing more engaging.
content
Ensure clarity in your instructions for pet care by being more specific and direct, such as specifying feeding times, to make your instructions easier to follow.
task response
Your letter effectively addresses all the points required by the task, providing clear details and instructions as requested.
tone
You maintained a friendly and respectful tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for writing to a friend.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gratitude
  • Pet sit
  • Contact details
  • Feeding schedule
  • Dietary restrictions
  • Exercise routine
  • Medication
  • Watering plants
  • Collecting mail
  • Trash disposal
  • Security system
  • Appliances
  • Clarification
  • Reassurance
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