The graph illustrates the process by which bricks are generated for the architecture industry.
The graph below illustrates the process by which
bricks
are made for the architecture industry.
Overall
, there are 5 major steps, which can be divided into main 3 steps such
as digging of
the earth a Change preposition
up
clay
after
this
clay
will be rolled and added to sand and water,the
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and the
last
one is cooling and packaging that stuff. Also
there are 5 specialized machines to produce Add a comma
Also,
bricks
such
as digger, roller, wire cutter, oven and chamber. And the
main source is Correct word choice
The
clay
.
To commence with, digged
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dug
clay
will go through the roller. Then
it will appear as metal
grid and Correct article usage
a metal
sand+water
will be added. Correct your spelling
water
This
complex of metal goes to a cutter which makes brick
of them.
Mould should be Fix the agreement mistake
bricks
dryed
in Correct your spelling
dried
oven
approximately for 1 or 2 days. Correct article usage
the oven
Dryed
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Dried
bricks
will be moderated in special
machine called Add an article
a special
cooling
chamber for 48 or 72 hours. Correct article usage
a cooling
Last
step of brick manufacturing is Change the article
The last
delivery
of packed Correct article usage
the delivery
bricks
to shops where it
can be consumed for the architectural industry.Correct pronoun usage
they
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