The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement- making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This

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picture illustrates the process of how

cement

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is made and how

cement

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produces concrete for building construction.

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, we can see four distinctive stages that each represent a part of the

cement

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-making process, and the

last

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stage is about concrete production.

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, some kind of stone powder is created by crushing clay and limestone.

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, the powder is moved by a mixer device into a rotating heater; in

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part, a smooth matter is made.

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cement

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is caused by a grinder and is put in some bags. In

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stage, which is the

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stage, concrete is produced by 15

percent

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cement

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, a tenth of water, more than 25

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sand, and a half of gravel, which

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are

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small stones. All of these ingredients are mixed by a concrete mixer.

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