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The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer's total sales in North America, South America, Europe and Asia.

The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer's total sales in North America, South America, Europe and Asia.
The given chart depicts the proportion of a
car
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factory
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's total
sales
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 each
year
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 in four different continents including Asia, Europe, South
America
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, and North
America
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 between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the total
sales
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 of the
car
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factory
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 in Asia experienced an upward trend
while
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 the opposite was true with South
America
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.
Besides
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, there was a fluctuation in the total
sales
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 of the
car
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 factories in South
America
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 and North
America
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.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of total
sales
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 of the Asia
car
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factory
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 started at 30% in 2006 and increased to 34% in 2007. It
then
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 remained stable in the next
year
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 and peaked at 50% in 2010. If we look at South
America
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, the trend is different. The proportion of total
sales
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 of the South
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America
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factory
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 began at 30% and it
then
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 remarkably decreased by
a
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half in the next three years. The figure continuously went up and finished at below 10%. Moving on to the other categories, the percentage of the Europe
car
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factory
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's total
sales
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 started at about 30% in 2006 and it
then
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 rose by 6% in the next two years.
However
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, the figure witnessed a decrease to around 30% in the
last
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year
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. If we look at North
America
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, the trend is similar. In the first
year
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 and
last
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year
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, the proportion of total
sales
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 of the North
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America
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American
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factory
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 was the same, which was 10%. The figure experienced a rapid decline from 2007 to 2009 and hit the bottom at below 5% in 2009.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, factory, sales, year, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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