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The chart below show average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities

The chart below show average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities
#show #hours #minutes #uk #males #females #activities
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The above table chart depicts the total
time
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spend
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spent
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 by people in
UK
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the UK
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on
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in
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 four different
catagories
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categories
. The first section is Food, Drinks and Tobacco, in
this
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 Turkey appears the highest. Above 32% of people spend
time
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for
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on
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this
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these
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 activities.
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 comes
the
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apply
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Italy. Clothing and Footwear
seems
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 to be
the
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moderate in comparison with all the three given specifications. Sweden holds the lowest
on
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in
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this
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 category
where as
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whereas
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 Italy stands
the
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at the
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 top among all. Both males and females in
UK
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the UK
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gives
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a
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apply
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very
less
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little
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time
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to
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on
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 Leisure or Educational activities.
This
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 looks
like
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very
dissappointing
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disappointing
.
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 should be the most allocated
time
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 compared to all but the chart shows a clear contradiction.
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 the table concludes with a point that
,
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 there is a significant difference in education and health sector versus food, drinks and tobacco among UK people.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time allocation
  • gender differences
  • daily activities
  • employment patterns
  • traditional gender roles
  • domestic chores
  • caregiving
  • leisure activities
  • hobbies
  • sports
  • entertainment
  • self-care
  • societal roles
  • gender equality
  • equitable responsibilities
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