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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table provides information about
percentage
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the percentage
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 of students
attended
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who attended
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 four different school types in the year 2000, 2005 and 2009.
Overall
, apart from community
schools
, other groups of educational institutions faced a declining trend throughout the years. The most popular ones
was
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were
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 voluntary-controlled
schools
,
then
 replaced by
the
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apply
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community
schools
. Specialized education always be the least popular among
the
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apply
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young adults.
According to
 the table,
the
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apply
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voluntary-controlled used to take up slightly more than half of the students
,
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then
 started to steadily decrease to 38% in 2005 and 20% in 2009 respectively.
The grammar
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Grammar
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schools
 used to have approximately a
quater
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quarter
 of teenagers study
with
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apply
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in 2000,
then
 continuously
fall
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fell
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 to 12% in 2009. Meanwhile, the specialist
schools
 remained in the
last
 place with a small decrease from 12% to 10%.
In contrast
, the community
schools
 were the only
one
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ones
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 with
an
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apply
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increasing growth in popularity, with
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a sharply
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sharply
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sharp
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 incline to 32%, and eventually took the top place with 58% of pupils
decided
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deciding
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 to
enroll
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enrol
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with
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apply
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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