You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The table provides information about

percentage

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the percentage

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of students

attended

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who attended

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four different school types in the year 2000, 2005 and 2009.

Overall

, apart from community

schools

, other groups of educational institutions faced a declining trend throughout the years. The most popular ones

was

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were

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voluntary-controlled

schools

then

replaced by

the

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apply

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community

schools

. Specialized education always be the least popular among

the

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apply

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young adults.

According to

the table,

the

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apply

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voluntary-controlled used to take up slightly more than half of the students

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then

started to steadily decrease to 38% in 2005 and 20% in 2009 respectively.

The grammar

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Grammar

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schools

used to have approximately a

quater

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quarter

of teenagers study

with

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apply

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in 2000,

then

continuously

fall

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fell

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to 12% in 2009. Meanwhile, the specialist

schools

remained in the

last

place with a small decrease from 12% to 10%.

In contrast

, the community

schools

were the only

one

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ones

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with

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apply

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increasing growth in popularity, with

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a sharply

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sharply

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sharp

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incline to 32%, and eventually took the top place with 58% of pupils

decided

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deciding

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enroll

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enrol

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with

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apply

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

165 words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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