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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The
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picture below depicts the process of electric generation by geothermal energy. As observed from the diagram, there are 5 general steps
happen
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that happen
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 in
this
 process. The first step involved cold
water
 pumped down into
injection
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an injection
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 well and the final step is
generator
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a generator
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 powered by
turbine
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the turbine
a turbine
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 to
produces
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 electricity. Based on the provided picture, the process
begin
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 with pumping down cold
water
 from the reservoir, into the injection well. The depth of
injection
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the injection
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 itself is about 4.5 km.
Next,
the
water
then got
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is
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 heated by the geothermal energy of the hot rocks in
geothermal
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the geothermal
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 zone and
move
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 into the production well section. When the
water
 temperature increases, it will pumped up from the production well to
condenser
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the condenser
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. In
condenser
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a condenser
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, the hot
water
converted
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is converted
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 into steam, which
used
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is used
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 to
drives
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drive
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 the turbine. The kinetic energy of
turbine
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the turbine
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 would converted into electricity by
generator
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the generator
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.
Then
, the electricity can be distributed for use.
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