Some people think studying in groups is better, while some think self-studying is better for school students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Studying with other people is
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believed
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some
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to be more significant rather than self-studying. I
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completely
agree with
this
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statement
as groups have not only
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social
benefits
,
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but
also
psychological
benefits
as well. To
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begin
with, studying in
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groups
undoubtedly makes students better in terms of social
benefits
. Studying with others is known to help increase communication during
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study
time and
this
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those more
socail
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sociable
. As confirmed by a number of reports claim that
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being
big
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in
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study
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a study
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has a lot of
beeficial
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beneficial
aspects in terms of social
benefits
.
For example
, HBR
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that
group
studying increase social
skilss
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skills
for those.
However
, people who prefer
self studying
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self-studying
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might have not
chance
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a chance
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to improve
social
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their social
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skills which can help them in their social
lifes
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.
Additionally
, studying in a
group
help
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helps
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not only
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socially
but psychologically as well. It is known that most of psychological
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diseases
are caused by being alone. So, self-studying might be
reason
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the reason
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of
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for
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being alone. Unlike
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alone,
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studying
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in a
group
helps to reduce stress which might affect us.
This
stress gives rise to
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psychological
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disease
in
long
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the long
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run. To sum it up, even though
self studying
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self-studying
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are
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is
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always needed to meet the demands
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of peoples'
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peoples'
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being alone.
Needles
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to say that
study
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in a
group
more
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is more
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beneficial for people.
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Spelling
Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling errors, such as 'belived' instead of 'believed', 'socail' instead of 'social', and 'desease' instead of 'disease'. Correct spelling is crucial for clear communication.
Examples
Provide more specific examples to support your points. While mentioning the HBR claim is a good start, including detailed instances or studies would strengthen your argument.
Sentence Structure
Work on the structure of your sentences for clarity. Some sentences are quite long and could be made more concise or split into two for better readability.
Counterargument
Engage more directly with the opposing viewpoint to fully address the prompt. Recognizing the benefits of self-studying before stating your preference strengthens your argument.
Position
Your essay has a clear position throughout, which fulfills the task requirement.
Progression
You have a logical progression of ideas, which is good for coherence and cohesion.
Conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint, reinforcing the essay’s argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative learning
  • peer interaction
  • cognitive stimulation
  • academic discussion
  • time management
  • personalized learning
  • self-motivation
  • critical thinking
  • resourceful
  • autonomous
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