Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some university
students
want to learn other subjects
in addition
to their main subjects
. While
others believe to
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in focusing
focus
studying
to get a particular qualification. Change preposition
on studying
This
essay will explain both perspective
between Change to a plural noun
perspectives
learn
additional Wrong verb form
learning
subject
out of the priority course or Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
focus
on specific Wrong verb form
focusing
skills
.
The students
want to learn other subjects
in addition
their
main Change preposition
to their
subjects
due to
their curiosity or they find out the main subjects
is
not their passion. One of the benefits is they can learn new things and broaden their knowledge. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Furthermore
, it is beneficial for them to see something from the
different perspective. Correct article usage
a
This
circumstance fits for
generalist jobs that require broad knowledge but just the surface information. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, public relation
, news anchor, and manager.
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relations
On the other hand
, others believe to
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in focusing
focus
on the main subjects
. It will be beneficial to master the skills
and keep the students
focus
to pursue the specific qualifications. Wrong verb form
focused
Consequently
, they can be an expert or specialist on
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in
the
specific field. It is important for jobs that require Correct article usage
a
the
particular Correct article usage
apply
skills
such
as doctor, engineer, and lawyer.
In conclusion, between learn
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learning
the
new Correct article usage
apply
subjects
or focus
on the main Wrong verb form
focusing
subjects
can be beneficial for students
. In my perspective, it is more important for student
to know their main goals, as Add an article
the student
a student
result
they can choose between Add an article
a result
this
two circumstances. It Correct determiner usage
these
depend
on career goals that will be pursued since people have different aims. Change the verb form
depends
To be a
generalist can study Verb problem
A
others
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other
subjects
to see from helicopter
view, but a specialist should Add an article
a helicopter
focus
to learn
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on learning
a particular
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a particular skill
particular skills
skills
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Coherence & Cohesion
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