Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some university
students
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want to learn other
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in addition
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to their main
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.
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others believe
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focus
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studying
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on studying
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to get a particular qualification.
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essay will explain both
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between
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additional
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out of the priority course or
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focus
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focusing
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on specific
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. The
students
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want to learn other
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in addition
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their
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main
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due to
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their curiosity or they find out the main
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not their passion. One of the benefits is they can learn new things and broaden their knowledge.
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, it is beneficial for them to see something from
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different perspective.
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circumstance fits
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generalist jobs that require broad knowledge but just the surface information.
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, public
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, news anchor, and manager.
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, others believe
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focus
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on the main
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. It will be beneficial to master the
skills
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and keep the
students
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focus
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focused
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to pursue the specific qualifications.
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, they can be an expert or specialist
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in
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the
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specific field. It is important for jobs that require
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particular
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such
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as doctor, engineer, and lawyer. In conclusion,
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learning
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the
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new
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or
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focus
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focusing
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on the main
subjects
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can be beneficial for
students
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. In my perspective, it is more important for
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the student
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to know their main goals, as
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a result
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they can choose between
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this
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two circumstances. It
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depends
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on career goals that will be pursued since people have different aims.
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generalist can study
others
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other
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subjects
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to see from
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view, but a specialist should
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to learn
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on learning
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a particular
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a particular skill
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skills
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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