The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate
about
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two types of TV shows in Australia,
reality
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shows and
game
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shows, liked
to watch
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watched
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by
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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and four different groups
of age
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aged
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16-24, 25-34, 35-44,
above
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and above
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45.
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, the percentage of
women
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in both
graph
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graphs
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is
same
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the same
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.
However
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, the
male
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number of male
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viewer
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viewers
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is
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increased
while
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they watch
game
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shows. And the people of age 25-34 and 34-44 are more like to watch
reality
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shows than
game
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shows. The proportion of individuals who like
reality
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shows
are
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is
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more in
compare
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comparison
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with
reality
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shows
exccept
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except
males. Only 35%
men
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of men
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like
reality
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shows
whereas
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the
figures
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figure
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for
women
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is double,
that is
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70%. The people who are above age 35 are
also
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huge
fan
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fans
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of
reality
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shows,
such
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as around 70%,
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that
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which
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is equal to the data collected by
women
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.
The individuals
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Individuals
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who are more than 45 years old like to watch
game
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shows.
Moreover
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, the percentage of men and
women
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is 10% less than those
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of indivduals
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indivduals
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individuals
,
that is
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around 60% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reality, game, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 11 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • viewership
  • genre
  • preference
  • demographic
  • age group
  • percentage
  • comparison
  • trend
  • balanced interest
  • inclination
  • significant difference
  • overwhelmingly
  • predominantly
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