The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts illustrate

about

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apply

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two types of TV shows in Australia,

reality

shows and

game

shows, liked

to watch

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watched

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male

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males

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and

female

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females

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and four different groups

of age

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aged

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16-24, 25-34, 35-44,

above

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and above

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45.

Overall

, the percentage of

women

in both

graph

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graphs

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same

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the same

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However

, the

male

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number of male

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viewer

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viewers

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apply

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increased

while

they watch

game

shows. And the people of age 25-34 and 34-44 are more like to watch

reality

shows than

game

shows. The proportion of individuals who like

reality

shows

are

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more in

compare

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comparison

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with

reality

shows

exccept

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except

males. Only 35%

men

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of men

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reality

shows

whereas

the

figures

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figure

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for

women

is double,

that is

70%. The people who are above age 35 are

also

huge

fan

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fans

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reality

shows,

such

as around 70%,

that

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which

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is equal to the data collected by

women

The individuals

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Individuals

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who are more than 45 years old like to watch

game

shows.

Moreover

, the percentage of men and

women

is 10% less than those

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of indivduals

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indivduals

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individuals

that is

around 60% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reality, game, women with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 11 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

166 words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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Topic Vocabulary:

viewership
genre
preference
demographic
age group
percentage
comparison
trend
balanced interest
inclination
significant difference
overwhelmingly
predominantly

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