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Cooking food is a waste of time in today's hectic life. Fast food restaurants are helpful in modern living and it is less stressful. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #waste #time #life #restaurants
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importanct
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importance
important
 of cooking which
was
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debate
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 now become
more
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 serious topic which many
people
claiming
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 in recent
year
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.
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my
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 views of
favoring
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 the positive/negative impact and
thus
, will lead to
logical
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a logical
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 conclusion. In my view,
people
 around the world have busy and stressful
life start
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 since they wake up everything
have
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 to be
hurry
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. Sometimes, they don't even have
time
 to
cooking
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.
In addition
, we have a
lot
 of fast
food
resturants
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restaurants
 where we can get the
food
 so fast
then
 can sit and eat in the office.
Thus
, it
make
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 everything so easy
for example
 you do not have to worry about what you will cook in the morning before
go
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going
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 to work, what
time
 you
could
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apply
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wake up and what
is
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ingredient
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ingredients
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 you have to buy.
Moreover
, Fast
food
resturants
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restaurants
 are very big
business
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businesses
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 and make a
lot
 of money. Nowadays,
People
 like to have
easy
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an easy
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 life and spend a
lot
 of
time
for
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on
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 outdoor activities with fast
food
.
On the other hand
, cooking
waste
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wastes
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time
to prepare
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preparing
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 ingredients, shopping and
wash
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washing
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 dishes that
why
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is why
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 a
lot
 of
people
 prefer fast
food
 because we just grab and go. In conclusion, fast
food
resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
really
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are really
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 helpful in
the
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a
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 hectic life.
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Language and sentence structure
Consider using a variety of sentence structures to make your essay more engaging and to showcase your language skills. Mixing simple, compound, and complex sentences can enhance the readability and sophistication of your writing.
Spelling and Grammar
Work on spelling and grammatical accuracy to make your arguments clearer and more professional. Pay attention to common mistakes like the spelling of 'important' and 'restaurant' and the correct use of articles ('a', 'the').
Position Statement
Clarify your stance at the beginning and end of your essay. Make sure your introduction clearly states whether you agree or disagree with the statement, and reiterate your position in the conclusion for greater impact.
Supporting Examples
Integrate more specific examples or evidence to support your points. While you've outlined the convenience of fast food, adding real-world examples or statistics can make your argument more compelling and persuasive.
Relevance to Topic
You've effectively discussed the convenience of fast food in relation to modern, busy lifestyles, which aligns well with the essay topic.
Conclusion Clarity
Your conclusion succinctly summarizes your viewpoint, reinforcing your argument about the role of fast food in hectic lives.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast-paced environment
  • time-consuming
  • productive tasks
  • leisure activities
  • homemade food
  • cost-effectiveness
  • emotional value
  • nutritional content
  • environmental degradation
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable option
  • valuable life skills
  • time management
  • integrated into
  • stress or time constraints
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