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Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Others say that having a friendly relation is better. What do you think?

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There are some thoughts about
students
 are afraid of
teachers
 may be good, but others believe that it is better to have a friendly link between both. In my opinion, I think
teachers
 should have a good relationship with
students
 but sometimes, be strict about it. There is one main reason making people think that
students
 should be afraid of the
teacher
.
This
 assumption comes from a deep-rooted thought that
students
 would not follow the
teacher
's instructions and run out of morale.
However
,
this
 thought may be wrong because
this
 method not only makes the relationship between tutors and pupils become worse
,
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 but
also
 makes
students
 hard to take full of knowledge that they receive.
For example
, if
students
 get stuck at some point in the problem, they may hesitate to ask tutors about a solution, gradually they will get slow progress in their performance after all.
Additionally
, in a
class
, the union of each individual is the most important thing in an academic environment to compete with other classes, and
teachers
 are fundamental keys to connecting those pieces,
otherwise
,
this
class
 would not work out.
However
,
teachers
 should
also
 be not too easy for
students
, as I have just mentioned these
teachers
 are navigators to direct them to the
right
 path. So if they are too easy or friendly, their
class
 will be out of control,
hence
, there will be no more
disciplined
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 or
organized
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.
As a result
, once more time, their performances would absolutely be affected with no
right
 morale. From those points, a
teacher
 who knows to be strict and
easy
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 appropriately at the
right
 time may be the best,
while
 they can navigate their little boys and girls to the
right
 path. In conclusion, making
students
 afraid of
teachers
 would not be a good idea, as it discourages
students
 from asking tutors when encountering a tricky question or separates each individual in a
class
.
On the other hand
, if they are easy for
students
, they may be out of control. So, the
teacher
 can balance two things above may be the best.
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