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Band 5.5

ou are planning to take a vacation. Writing a letter to a friend. In your letter: describe the vacation spot you have chosen explain how you plan to spend your time there invite your friend to join you on your vacation

#ou #vacation #friend #spot #plan #time
Dear Karan, I hope you are doing well.
Actually
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i
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I
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 got a chance
for
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to
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apply
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go
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 my vacation from my office. I have already applied
the
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 holidays for next week. As we discussed
last
 time,
i
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I
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choose
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chose
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 the
vancouver
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Vancouver
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 area as it is
beautiful
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a beautiful
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 hilly area and full of forests where we could do
lot
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a lot
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 of activities.
Although
i
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I
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 have planned how we
spent
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will spend
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 our time there , you can
also
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there
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it there
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.
Firslty
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Finally
, we will go Sushi
hotel
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Hotel
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, which is famous
fro
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for
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 its delicious
chinese
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Chinese
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 dishes. I know you like to eat
chinese
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 food.
Secondly
, we would do river rafting
anf
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and
 bungee jumping which is on number 2 on our bucket list.
In addition
 to
this
, we will be taking some swimming classes as
per
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advised by your grandparents.
Moreover
,
i
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 would invite you
with
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inside from my heart to join me on the vacation site.
i
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 have already packed your favourite book, hat and jacket too.
i
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I
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 look forward to
hear
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 from you as soon as possible yours lovingly, Smith
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to maintain a consistent tense throughout your letter to improve clarity and coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a more logical structure, you can clearly separate your ideas into different paragraphs, dedicating one paragraph to each of the main points.
Task Achievement
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and spelling mistakes as correcting these will polish your writing.
Task Achievement
Consider including more specific details about why you chose the vacation spot and how it relates to your interests or past experiences for a more engaging narrative.
Task Achievement
Engaging topic introduction and warm closure add a friendly touch to the letter.
Task Achievement
Your enthusiasm and invitation to your friend are clearly expressed, effectively achieving the task's purpose.
Coherence and Cohesion
Good use of varied sentence structures to keep the reader engaged.
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