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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
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 maps depict the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. The first
map
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 was about
two
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 hundred years ago and the second is now. Now, there is a new
Lenton
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 housing estate near Lake
Lenton
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 which in the past had
Lenton
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 wood but recently cut down and repeated by housing.
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, there are
two
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 new residential including business and shopping replacing housing areas in the past. At the same time, In the west of the
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 is a new main railway station extending from north to south of the
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. The railway crosses the river Twine and replaces the Twine toll bridge and the railway replaces all of the fields in the southwest of the
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. Meanwhile, In the north of
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 the Lord Westley's Houses was replaced by The Red Lion and
Lenton
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 Hotel. But,
two
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 facilities have in the same area
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such
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 as market square and Town hall.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, map, lenton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • amenities
  • thoroughfare
  • connectivity
  • industrial development
  • factory
  • public amenities
  • recreational facilities
  • educational facilities
  • residential expansion
  • apartment blocks
  • commercial activity
  • shopping centers
  • restaurants
  • single-family homes
  • development
  • open field
  • noticeable change
  • replacing
  • establishment
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