In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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this
fast paced
economic era, Add a hyphen
fast-paced
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a numbers
numbers
of married Fix the agreement mistake
number
womans
decided to work Correct your spelling
women
woman
along with
their husbands to reach family's
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the family's
finanancial
stability. Some believe that Correct your spelling
financial
this
approach could benefit children
of these families, whilst others state that Correct article usage
the children
this
generation might experienced
various drawbacks Change the verb form
experience
such
as lack of parental support
, emotional support
and lonliness
. In Correct your spelling
loneliness
this
essay
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essay,
i
will shed some Change the capitalization
I
lights
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light
about
the positive and negative impacts of the given notion.
On the one hand, Change preposition
on
it is clear that
if both
parents of a family are
work together to Unnecessary verb
apply
achive
financial goals, they might guarantee their Correct your spelling
achieve
offsprings
a quality life by Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
serve
them high education, rich nutrient foods that could Change the verb form
serving
support
them in the future in triving
their dreams. Correct your spelling
living
For instance
, a boy was raised in a poor family unable to afford education, low quality
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low-quality
of
food, and Change preposition
apply
bad
environment to Correct article usage
a bad
grown
upWrong verb form
grow
.
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in.
Consequently
, due to
lack of nutrition intake, he might faced several delay
in learning new things at school compared to his peers with better diet.
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delays
On the other hand
, It is obvious that both
parents has
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have
pivotal
role Add an article
a pivotal
for
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in
minor's
development Correct article usage
the minor's
both
in physical and mental aspects. The absence of parental support
can lead to numerous negative effects in youngsters, such
as rebelious
that might occur Correct your spelling
rebellion
as a result
of lack of parental supervision. In order to address this
issue, emotional touch and manners should be delivered to children during parenting activities. Take this
for example
, a parents
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parents
a parent
left
their Wrong verb form
leaves
seven-years old
child to work with TV at home, day by day he absorbs Add a hyphen
seven-years-old
numbers
of unfiltered information and scenes, he sees Fix the agreement mistake
number
a
combat shows on TV and Remove the article
apply
begin
to practice it on his friends, Correct subject-verb agreement
begins
this
might be hazardous for him and his environment in long
term if not supervised by Add an article
the long
olders
.
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holders
elders
older
To sum up
, both
ecomonomics
and parental Correct your spelling
economics
involment
play Correct your spelling
involvement
important
in parental activities, Correct article usage
an important
However
, both
benefits could be achieved by good time management, strategies and awareness in modern families.Submitted by vabeladita on
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