Some people feel that good training courses can make anyone a teacher, while others say that good teachers cannot be produced by simply following a training course. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Teachers play a paramount role in shaping the future generation.Teaching is a passion anyone who is
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interested towards teaching can become
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teacher in schools , colleges and universities.But these days to work in an organised teaching field government has set certain qualifications to enter into institutions. I strongly believe that it is necessary that
one
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degree and professional course to teach. School is the primary socialisation where
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most of his or her time . Teachers literally play
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role in shaping them.To become
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professional teacher it is really necessary ,that
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undergo certain training
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workshops ,
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in their lifetime which will enable them to be
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.
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candidate ,
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who has completed
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bachelor of education , it's really necessary to undergo certain teaching training
course
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where
one
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cognitive development,
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teaching and learning methods for the different class sections of society.
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, we are moving towards modernisation and
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sticking towards the traditional method of teaching patterns. These days majority of the schools and universities have adopted the smartboard,e-learning ,innovative methods of teaching...,etc because that keeps students engaged in all
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activities irrespective of the subjects and interests. I strongly believe that
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it is necessary that every person who has
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to work in
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filed
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is
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priority that they undergo certain programs, workshops and courses to update themselves and apply the same in classroom teaching and learning methods.
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  • pedagogical theories
  • classroom management
  • subject matter expertise
  • practical experience
  • intrinsic qualities
  • passion
  • empathy
  • inspire
  • innate attributes
  • foundational knowledge
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