The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the percentage of
men
and women drivers passing the driving
test
in one Asian country between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
,
men
had the
least
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lowest
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driving
test
passing rate between 1980 and 2010.
Men
had the lowest passing rate in 1980 with only approximately 28%
passers
.
However
, there was a constant slight increase of around 8% of
men
passing the driving
test
in 1990 which had around 46%
test
passers
.
Moreover
, from the year 2000 to 2010, there was a plateau of
test
passers
nearly 50%. Women, in
comparison
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comparison,
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have higher passing
rate
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rates
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in driving tests than
men
. In 1980, there were nearly 50% of driving exam
passers
which is around 20% higher than
men
in the same year. There was a significant incline of
passers
from 1990 to 2000, which are approximately 52% and approximately 68% respectively.
However
, a decade after (2010), there was a slight drop in the percentage of
passers
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around less than 65%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, test, passers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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