The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the percentage of
men
and women drivers passing the driving Use synonyms
test
in one Asian country between 1980 and 2010. Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
men
had the Use synonyms
least
driving Correct word choice
lowest
test
passing rate between 1980 and 2010.
Use synonyms
Men
had the lowest passing rate in 1980 with only approximately 28% Use synonyms
passers
. Use synonyms
However
, there was a constant slight increase of around 8% of Linking Words
men
passing the driving Use synonyms
test
in 1990 which had around 46% Use synonyms
test
Use synonyms
passers
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, from the year 2000 to 2010, there was a plateau of Linking Words
test
Use synonyms
passers
nearly 50%.
Women, in Use synonyms
comparison
have higher passing Add the comma(s)
comparison,
rate
in driving tests than Fix the agreement mistake
rates
men
. In 1980, there were nearly 50% of driving exam Use synonyms
passers
which is around 20% higher than Use synonyms
men
in the same year. There was a significant incline of Use synonyms
passers
from 1990 to 2000, which are approximately 52% and approximately 68% respectively. Use synonyms
However
, a decade after (2010), there was a slight drop in the percentage of Linking Words
passers
Use synonyms
with
around less than 65%.Change preposition
apply
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