The line graph gives data on the proportion of children respects to the total young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001. The proportion of children are categories in four age groups.

The line graph gives data on the proportion of children respects to the total young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001. The proportion of children are categories in four age groups.
The graph compares four distinct
age
categories based on the percentage of children to the
overall
juvenile population in
UK
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between 1990 and 2001.
Overall
, the percentage of the children experienced different trends over the given periods.
While
the
age
group
of 10-14 witnessed a
consistant
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consistent
constant
surge from the lowest to the highest point, the 0-4
age
category plunged, making their rank change, from the second to the
last
rank in 2001. On the other
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, the other categories saw
a dramatic fluctuations
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. Started with about 26% in 1991, the
group
of 0-4
age
saw a small rise to approximately 26.5% in 1992 before falling steadily until it reached a low of roughly 23.5% in 2001. The figure for
5
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-9
age
group
began from just nearly 25% in 1990 and grew significantly to a little over 26% in 1997,
then
it dropped gradually to
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just over 25 in 2001.
By contrast
, the
group
of 10-14
climb
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continuosly
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continuously
from just above 23% to more than 26%,
surpassed
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the
group
of 0-4, 5-9, and 15-19 in 1992, 1995, and 1997, respectively.
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