The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
The graph illustrates worldwide
water
expenditure in three departments between 1900 and 2000. Also
the chart Add a comma
Also,
similarly
provides data about water
consumption but in different categories in Congo
and Brazil
in 2000.
Overall
, in
is evident that the total Correct your spelling
it
water
consumption in Agriculture
, Industry and Domestic sectors experienced a significant increase over the Correct article usage
the Agriculture
100 year
period, with Add a hyphen
100-year
with
Agriculture purposes possessing the largest amount Remove the redundancy
apply
while
Private users having
the lowest. Wrong verb form
had
In addition
, Brazil
spent a
substantially more Remove the article
apply
water
overall
and per person than Congo
.
Looking at the details, rising from around 500kg cubic meters in 1900 to about 1200 m3 in 1950, water
usage for Agriculturals
reasons Correct your spelling
agricultural
then
exponentially increased to reach 3000 m3 in 2000 .Furhermore
, The figures for Correct your spelling
Furthermore
Indutries
and houses are relatively Correct your spelling
industries
simialar
during the first 50 years, with both gradually rising from a mere 50 m3 to about 200 m3. After that, they witnessed a Correct your spelling
similar
considerabke
increase to around 1300 m3 and 500 m3 respectively.
Correct your spelling
considerable
On the other hand
, Brazil
used a
much larger Correct article usage
apply
water
for every person than Congo
, with 359 m3 and 8m3
respectively. It is noteworthy that Correct your spelling
8 m3
Brazil
's population ( 176 million) and Area ( 26500 km2) both outnumber the Congo
, having 5.2 million people and 100km2
land area.Correct article usage
a 100km2
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