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the line graph shows the sales figure for bananas imported to four countries from 1996 to 2004

the line graph shows the sales figure for bananas imported to four countries from 1996 to 2004
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The given line graph depicts the total
amount
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 of bananas imported from four countries during the
year
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 1996 to 2004.
Over all
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, in the
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year
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years
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 1996 to 2004 all
the
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apply
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four
countries
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countries'
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bananas
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banana
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 prices
had
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showed high fluctuations. The USA remains constant and
showed
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shows
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limited
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a limited
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amount
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 of
price
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 variations respectively. Meanwhile, Japan had the highest sales rate of 3
USD
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 per
kg
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 in the
year
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 1998, with a major fall
by
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of
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 2
USD
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 per
kg
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 in the
year
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 1999. Eventually, Japan
had shown
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 fluctuations over 2.5
USD
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 to 2
USD
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 in the following years to reach the
least
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lowest
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amount
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 of bananas
price
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 to 1.5 in the
year
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 2003.
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, France showed
steady
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a steady
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 pricing range with the
amount
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 of sales not surging more than 2
USD
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 per
kg
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 in the upcoming years.
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,
German
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Germany
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 started
with
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at
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 1.5
USD
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 per
kg
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 and plunged to 2.5
USD
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 per
kg
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 within a period of one
year
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and
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with a sudden drop of 2.5
USD
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 to 1 to 1.5
USD
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 by the following
year
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.
This
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 showed the same fluctuating
price
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 range as Japan. The USA maintained its
price
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 when compared to
other
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the other
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 three countries.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, year, price, usd, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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