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The bar chart shows the percentage of international students enrolled in British universities in two years, 1990 and 2014.

The bar chart shows the percentage of international students enrolled in British universities in two years, 1990 and 2014.
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The above bar graph represents the data about international
students
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 enrolled in British Universities for the years 1990 and 2014.
Overall
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, the chart doesn't hold much variation in both years.
Although
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, Brighton stands top of the list with 13
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percentage
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 of international
students
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 in the
year
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 2014
whereas
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Bimingham
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Birmingham
 holds
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the secound
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secound
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second
 place in the same
year
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 with 12
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percentage
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 of enrollment.
Cardif
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Cardiff
 and Hudders
field
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 were the two universities with
least
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the least
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 enrollment information about international
students
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.
In contrast
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,
Cardif
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Cardiff
 is the only given university that showed an opposite trend from
rest
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the rest
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 of the data.
That is
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, in the
year
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 2009, Cardif
university
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University
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 enrolled around 2
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percentage
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per cent
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 of international
students
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whereas
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 in the
year
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 2014, it
got
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apply
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dropped to 1
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percentage
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.
In addition
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 to that, Liverpool was the only university that enrolled
equal
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an equal
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 number of
students
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 in both years.
To conclude
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, 2014 seems to be the
year
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 with
higher
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a higher
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 number of international
students
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 enrolled than in 2009.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, percentage, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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