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Some people think that all unviersity students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years many people
assume
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have assumed
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 that we should study subjects that we are interested in. Is it
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better
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 to study subjects
whatever
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that
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 we like
than
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rather than
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 those which will be useful in the future? Some people believe
allowing
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in allowing
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 students to learn practical
matter
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matters
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 for the upcoming days,
whereas
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 others believe
otherwise
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.
However
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, I strongly believe that the advantages of letting scholars
to
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choose
the
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their
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favorite
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favourite
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 subjects outweigh the drawbacks. It is argued that it gives an ease to develop university students' dreams pathway if they have
option
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 to choose their classes.
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, most of them will enjoy their time gaining
a
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new knowledge they want to learn without having
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pressure to do so, resulting
high
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in high
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 scores in their semester report.
Secondly
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, by becoming proficient in what they have selected, they will
be
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initiatively create new jobs in the current fields.
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, is opportunity will not be found if there is
limitation
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a limitation
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 to the course choices,
according to
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 what
beneficial
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is beneficial
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 in the future
although
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 the plus point is that it will be relevant to the recent career demand.
On the other hand
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, freeing someone to acquire
understanding
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an understanding
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in
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of
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 what they like will lead them
in
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to
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 gaining satisfaction. First of all, no force in our
decion making
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decision-making
 actually
happen
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 to be a turning point to a passionate
life
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 as an outcome.
Beside
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this
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, individuals can structure things like educational
route
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routes
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 to
be align
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be aligned
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 with their
life
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 purpose.
Nonetheless
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, attaining skills
that
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is corresponding
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correspond
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 with what is helpful in
time
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the time
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 ahead will bring a person a secured job, having financial benefits as a
consequent
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consequence
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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 freedom in topic
chooshing
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choosing
 might bring an easy
life
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 journey
than
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then
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 restricting
of
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apply
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what appears to be useful in the future. It has more advantages, specifically in terms of proficiency and
life
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 purpose.

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grammar/spelling
Try to avoid common spelling mistakes (e.g., 'university', 'initiatively') to enhance clarity and accuracy.
content
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sentence structure
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organization
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conclusion
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task response
You have articulated a clear personal opinion, aligning with the essay prompt’s requirement for an own opinion.
essay structure
Your essay structure includes both an introduction and a conclusion, adhering to the essential format of an academic essay.
argument exploration
You presented both sides of the argument, which shows an attempt to discuss the views comprehensively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • passion-driven learning
  • creativity and satisfaction
  • employability
  • job market trends
  • economic growth
  • practicality
  • cultural richness
  • critical thinking skills
  • global economic standpoint
  • technological advancement
  • oversupply of skills
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