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Band 5.5

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart presents the percentage of components of Gross Domestic Product in the UK for eight years,
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 from 1992 until 2000.
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IT
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industry
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contirbute
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contributed
 more
for
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 the UK's GDP rather than
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service
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industry
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 since 1992. We
also
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 can see that the percentage of
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service
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industry
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 getting higher every year.
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Meanwhile
,
IT
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industry
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 goes fluctuate. In detail,
IT
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industry
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reach
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their
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 peak
on
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 2000 by contributing about 14
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percent
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for
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 the UK's GDP and
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service
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industry
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got
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 8
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percent
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 in the same year. IT
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 decrease
on1996
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in on1996
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 but
then
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goes
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 far
on
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 1998 until it
reach12
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reached 12
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. In
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, both
IT
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industry
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 and
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service
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industry
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 were
in
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 the lowest point
on
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 1992
where
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its
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 only can reach around 6
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percent
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 and 4
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percent
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 during the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, service, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • economic measure
  • components
  • percentage
  • trend
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • fluctuation
  • contribution
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significance
  • timeframe
  • comparative analysis
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