your workplace does not have a parking area for cars and it is causing some problems. write a letter to your manager ans include the following: -describe the problem it has caused -explain what benefits a parking area would bring to the company -suggest a solution

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Dear sir, I am writing
this
letter to
show
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my concern regarding parking
space
for cars in our office as
this
is causing a lot of issues. I have to park my car in the morning way far from our office almost 15 minutes away which is wasting my time and money as it is paid parking. I will suggest you
to
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buy some parking
space
in our office apartment as it will solve many problems
of
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for
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employees .
Also
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Also,
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you will get benefits from
this
by taking
small
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a small
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amount
for
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of
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parking
space
and by saving time. some people go for lunch and when they
came
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come
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back they won't
be
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apply
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able to get
parking
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a parking
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space
and they
had
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have
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to park their vehicle somewhere on the roadside which is very inconvenient.
in
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addition ,
due to
improper parking there is a chance for
stole
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steals
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the vehicle. To solve
this
issue, it is better to buy some additional
space
for the parking ,so that it improves
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the panctuality
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panctuality
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punctuality
of our employers and their work outcome. Hope you will take
this
into consideration.
Thakyou
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Thankyou
Thank you
, Kiran
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greeting and closing
Start by addressing your manager with a more specific salutation to make your letter professional and personalized.
complete response
Consider elaborating on how the lack of parking affects not just time and money, but perhaps also morale, safety, and the professional image of the company.
greeting and closing
Adding a closing line that expresses eagerness for a positive resolution can reinforce your professionalism and courtesy.
task achievement
It would enhance your argument to include more detailed suggestions for solving the parking issue, such as proposing a specific location or a partnership with nearby facilities.
task achievement
You have clearly communicated the primary concerns and offered a logical solution, which shows good task response.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-organized, with each paragraph dedicated to a different aspect of the issue, which strengthens its coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Maintaining a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter is highly effective for the situation and demonstrates a suitable writing tone.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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