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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table above
show
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shows
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 the amount of
medals
 won by the ten different
countries
 in the London 2012 Olympic
games
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Games
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. The table is
rank
Wrong verb form
ranked
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 by the
number
 of
gold
medals
 the
countries
 won,
therfore
Correct your spelling
therefore
, the United
states
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States
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 is on the 1st place because it won the most
gold
medals
. The United
states
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States
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also
 won the most silver
medals
 and the most total
number
 of
medals
. Some
coutries
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countries
 won more total
number
 of
medals
 but
still
Add a missing verb
are still
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 in a lower place because they have fewer
gold
medals
 than other
countries
.
For example
, Russia has 82
medals
 won in total,
while
the
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apply
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Great
Britian
Correct your spelling
Britain
 has only 65
medals
 won in total. But
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Great
Britian
Correct your spelling
Britain
 won 29
gold
medals
while
 Russia won 24
gold
medals
, so the ranking of Russia is 1 behind
the
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apply
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Great
Britian
Correct your spelling
Britain
.
To conclude
, the table
show
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shows
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 the
number
 of different types of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
medals
 won by the top ten
countries
 in the London 2012 Olympic
games
Capitalize word
Games
show examples
, with the United
State
Fix the agreement mistake
States
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be
Wrong verb form
being
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 the 1st one.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, countries, number, gold with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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