The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The table above
show
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shows
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the amount of
medals
won by the ten different
countries
in the London 2012 Olympic
games
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Games
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. The table is
rank
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ranked
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by the
number
of
gold
medals
the
countries
won,
therfore
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therefore
, the United
states
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States
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is on the 1st place because it won the most
gold
medals
. The United
states
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States
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also
won the most silver
medals
and the most total
number
of
medals
. Some
coutries
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countries
won more total
number
of
medals
but
still
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are still
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in a lower place because they have fewer
gold
medals
than other
countries
.
For example
, Russia has 82
medals
won in total,
while
the
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apply
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Great
Britian
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Britain
has only 65
medals
won in total. But
the
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apply
show examples
Great
Britian
Correct your spelling
Britain
won 29
gold
medals
while
Russia won 24
gold
medals
, so the ranking of Russia is 1 behind
the
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apply
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Great
Britian
Correct your spelling
Britain
.
To conclude
, the table
show
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shows
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the
number
of different types of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
medals
won by the top ten
countries
in the London 2012 Olympic
games
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Games
show examples
, with the United
State
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States
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be
Wrong verb form
being
show examples
the 1st one.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, countries, number, gold with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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