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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table above
show
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 the amount of
medals
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 won by the ten different
countries
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 in the London 2012 Olympic
games
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Games
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. The table is
rank
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ranked
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 by the
number
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 of
gold
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medals
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 the
countries
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 won,
therfore
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therefore
, the United
states
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States
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 is on the 1st place because it won the most
gold
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medals
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. The United
states
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States
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also
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 won the most silver
medals
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 and the most total
number
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 of
medals
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. Some
coutries
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countries
 won more total
number
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 of
medals
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 but
still
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are still
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 in a lower place because they have fewer
gold
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medals
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 than other
countries
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.
For example
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, Russia has 82
medals
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 won in total,
while
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the
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Great
Britian
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Britain
 has only 65
medals
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 won in total. But
the
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apply
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Great
Britian
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Britain
 won 29
gold
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medals
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while
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 Russia won 24
gold
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medals
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, so the ranking of Russia is 1 behind
the
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apply
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Great
Britian
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Britain
.
To conclude
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, the table
show
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shows
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 the
number
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 of different types of
the
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apply
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medals
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 won by the top ten
countries
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 in the London 2012 Olympic
games
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Games
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, with the United
State
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States
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be
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being
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 the 1st one.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, countries, number, gold with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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