The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in teo separate years.

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below indicate the energy production resources

such

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, Coal, Gas, Petro,

Nucler

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nuclear

and Others in 1995 and 2005. The

measurments

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measurements

are with

percentage

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. In both years Coal has

highest

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usage

while

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Others

has

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the lowest usage.

To begin

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with, in 1995 Coal was on the top with 29.80 percent

then

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in 2005 had a small rise reaching 30.93 percent. In 1995 Gas was second most used with 29,63 and in 2005 had a gradual growth reaching 30.31. In 1995 Petro was third most used with 29.27 percent but in 2005 had a considerable drop

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reached 19.55. In 1995 Nuclear was second

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used with 6.40

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in 2005 had a significant increase which reached 10.10. And in 1995 Other was the

most less

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used with 6.40 again in 2005 was the

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used with a moderate increase that reached 9.10.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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142 words

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The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in teo separate years.

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?