The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in teo separate years.

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below indicate the energy production resources

such

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, Coal, Gas, Petro,

Nucler

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nuclear

and Others in 1995 and 2005. The

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measurements

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. In both years Coal has

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usage

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the lowest usage.

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with, in 1995 Coal was on the top with 29.80 percent

then

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in 2005 had a small rise reaching 30.93 percent. In 1995 Gas was second most used with 29,63 and in 2005 had a gradual growth reaching 30.31. In 1995 Petro was third most used with 29.27 percent but in 2005 had a considerable drop

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reached 19.55. In 1995 Nuclear was second

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used with 6.40

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in 2005 had a significant increase which reached 10.10. And in 1995 Other was the

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used with 6.40 again in 2005 was the

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used with a moderate increase that reached 9.10.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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142 words

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