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The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart depicts ten nations and their use of
electricity
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,
along with
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 how much
electricity
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 was produced by them in 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
although
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 China and the United States are the first and second countries, Germany and Korea are the ninth and tenth countries for using and producing
electricity
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 in the year given.
To begin
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 with, China is number one in
this
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 chart; there was a slight difference between using and creating
electricity
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 which generated more electric current in 2014. We can see the same result for other countries like the United States, Japan, India, Canada, France, and Brazil,
although
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electricity
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 was created more in the United States than those nations which are given. Korea and Russia had the same production and consumption in the year given.
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, the only nation in which
electricity
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 usage was roughly more, was Germany.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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