The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four

clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
The line graph illustrates the number of weekly patients' visits
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four clinics in one hospital with
complains
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of birth control, eye,
diabetic
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and dental between 2010 and 2016.
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