The given graph depicts the average figure of British citizens used to travel everyday by car,bus or train from 1970 to 2030.
The given graph illustrates the average number of British inhabitants used to travel every day by some vehicles namely car ,
bus
and train during a 30-year period
from 1970
Overall
, the proportion of commuters moving by car was highest. Meanwhile, the figure
for buses ranked second at the beginning of the period
but at the end
of the period
, ranked lowest. By contrast
, the figure
for trains at the beginning was lowest then
climbed up higher than the figure
for cars.
In 1970, the number of travellers who took a trip at 5 million
people
then
it rapidly increased to 7 million
people
in 2000. Surprisingly, it continued to go up and reach a peak of 9 million
people
to finish the whole period
in 2030.
In the meantime, the figure
for bus
and train saw a contrasting trend. In the beginning, the amount commuters on the bus
were 4 million
people
, 2 million
higher than the train. Nevertheless
, the figure
for buses and trains continued up and down and finally
witnessed at the same point together in 2015, was 3,5 million
people
. Remarkably, the number of travellers on the bus
gradually declined, ranking lowest at 3 million
in 2030 while
the figure
for trains saw a jump to 5 million
people
to finish the entire period
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