International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

There are different views on the impact of international tourism.
While
some
people
believe it will harm indigenous
people
and their environment
due to
the disrespectful and reckless behaviours, I still think the benefits outweigh the downsides because it helps countries to progressively have a good fiscal condition.
To begin
with the negative impacts, the presence of international
tourists
can
possess
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threats to local
people
,
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since they tend to act
disrespectful
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toward local cultures. Some of them might find unfamiliar values that sometimes
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align with their
owns
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, which can make them behave rudely toward local traditions and indigenous
people
.
This
condition has been occurred a few years ago in Dayak, Kalimantan. Some African
tourists
have been severely punished because they were spitting on one of the local tour guides
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explanation
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about the sacred white stones, which turned out
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a different historical value from
them
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.
However
, I think
this
problem can be addressed by distributing a special handbook to introduce the local culture alongside its value,
thus
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the visitors can do a brief skim on what they will hear during the trip.
Moreover
, it
also
harms the surrounding
environments
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because
tourists
can be reckless.
Due to
their initial visit to some countries, there is a likelihood that they will be fascinated with landscapes or findings that they see during their trip, which possibly fail them to notice some warning and careful signs that
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been issued.
This
phenomenon has been experienced by Bandi, an Indian tourist who visited the
Sumateran
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Jungle two years ago to
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the Rafflesia Arnoldi flower. Because he was too mesmerized
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the flower’s appearance, he accidentally stepped on the other Rafflesia flowers.
Nevertheless
, I think
this
situation can be handled by imposing a strict regulation to control visitor’s behaviours when they visit certain places. Despite the drawbacks, international tourism has a remarkable contribution to
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local and national fiscal growth.
This
benefit has been seen in Indonesia, which was reported to have a subtle increase
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their national income by 35%
last
year,
due to
the influx of foreign visitors to Bali. Specifically on the local scale, the arrival of
tourists
has been stated by some sellers of street vendors in Bali as their primary source of income that eventually
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them to afford daily needs. From those facts,
therefore
, I firmly believe that the positive outcomes have
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significant impact since
it
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can gradually increase the economic condition of local
people
and the country.
To conclude
, even though the arrival of international
tourists
can possibly
possess
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dangers to local
people
and the
surroundings
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environment because they can act
disrespectful
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and
reckless
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during their visit, I still think that the
given
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benefit
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helping locals and the country have a better financial state, far outweighs the downsides.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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