The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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The bar chart details how visitors from China, the USA, Turkey and Brazil

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Holiday in Greece in August 2019. The data reveals a clear relationship between the time spent on the activities. Turning first of all to Chinese visitors, it can be seen that reading

books

has the biggest proportion with eight hours. Moving to the second part-time used at the beach is three hours which is less than half of reading

books

and

also

the least hour compared to the other three countries. As far as the Chinese tourists are concerned, Brazilian and Turkish tourists have the same ratio for each activity. These countries prefer to go to the beach rather than reading

books

While

Americans and Chinese prefer to read

books

most time. By way of summary, from the information provided in the bar chart, it can be seen that visiting attractions has the lowest proportion of these four activities.

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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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