The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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The bar chart details the proportion of hours per day that tourists from China, America, Turkey and Brazil spent on leisure activities during their vacation in Greece in 2019. In the first

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it can be seen that the tourist spent the most

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reading books

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they spent the least

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visiting places. The graph

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shows that Chinese

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read the most and spend more than eight hours on average,

whereas

Turkish and Brazilian

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spent just half the amount on the same activity. Moving to the next value, the bar graph shows that Brazilian visitors spent the longest

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at the seashore, with an average of six hours per day,

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Chinese tourists spent only half the

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going out to the beach. By way of summary, from the information provided in the bar

graph

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it can be seen that

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the

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annual leave outside of China appears to be spent in roughly the same way.

In addition

, Americans and Turkish, Brazilians and Turkish people spend the same

time

visiting places and reading books.

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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

Many people say that we have developed into a “throw-away” culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem?

Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

Some people today feel that physical money will no longer be used in the future. Others feel it will still have some uses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree

Write a letter to your friend who lives in another country and in your letter, - invite him or her to a public event in your country - describe the public event - explain other plans you have for your friend when he or she visits.

Write a letter to your friend who lives in another country and in your letter,  - invite him or her to a public event in your country   - describe the public event   - explain other plans you have for your friend when he or she visits.