Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that,in today's world,subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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day no age opinion is divided over whether some people think that

History

is the most essential subject in a school curriculum that children should learn. Other people view

Science

and

Technology

are more necessary than

History

. In

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I will look at both sides of

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as well as

offer my own point of view. Turning first of all to the arguments in

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idea, it goes without saying learning

History

expresses the background of each country including world wars that

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happened many decades ago,so kids should know that their country has been changed for a long time.

Furthermore

, studying historical subjects provides knowledge for kids in terms of economy. As far as the other side of

this

debate is concerned, it is generally acknowledged that

Science

and

Technology

are the most conducive to global development.

For instance

, vaccines are now being proven by many scientists and it requires various knowledge about

science

and

technology

. It may

also

be worth noting that students who put much effort

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and

technology

will have a better chance of securing high-paying positions or

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future. By way of conclusion, from the ideas and examples above, it can be seen that there are valid arguments on both sides of

this

debate.

However

, I am of the opinion that, in the grand scheme of things,

History

subjects should still be emphasized to avoid repeating horrific

history

such

as discrimination and war.

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Task Achievement

Consider elaborating more on how history helps us understand change and societal development, connecting it more explicitly to the importance of learning history.

Task Achievement

Provide more detailed examples to strengthen your arguments, especially when discussing the importance of Science and Technology.

Coherence & Cohesion

Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas more seamlessly across paragraphs.

Coherence & Cohesion

Try to balance the length and depth of discussion between the two viewpoints to enhance the effectiveness of your argument.

Coherence & Cohesion

You presented a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively outlining your discussion and stating your opinion.

Task Achievement

Your essay provides a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument before stating your own opinion.

Task Achievement

Good use of examples, although more specificity could enhance your argument further.

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4 paragraphs

251 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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retrospect
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reflect on
sharpen
evaluate
significance
heritage
legacy
advent
breakthroughs
sustain
sustainability
revolutions
empowered
overcome
transform
advancements
collaboration
cooperation
diversity
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