After being punished, many criminals continue to commit crimes. Why do some people commit crimes even after having been punished? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem.
There is a rising concern towards the fact that a large amount of caught and released outlaws still continue their illegal
activites
. Correct your spelling
activities
This
essay will examine the possible cause for
Change preposition
of
this
issue and try giving
a solution.
To start with, we must look into the fact that most of the crime happens in a nation or a state with economic disaster. Change the verb form
to give
In other words
, low economy, poverty and high levels of inflation will cause low salaries and absurd prices on products which will then
push the citizens into stealing to provide themselves
or their families, even after being in jail. Change preposition
for themselves
For example
, Russian civillians
during the economic crisis of Correct your spelling
civilians
Change the article
the 90s
90s
were in deep poverty and had to thieve in order to survive, the caught and released criminals had a choice of either Correct your spelling
'90s
continue
living in hellish conditions or Wrong verb form
continuing
do
crime.
To tackle Wrong verb form
doing
this
problem, the national government could do whatever reforms possible to raise its economy which will uplift the quality of life. In other words
, fixing the economical
issues will remove the Replace the word
economic
neccessity
of burglary to survive and the released lawbreakers could reintegrate themselves back into Correct your spelling
necessity
the
society, now that they have working opportunities. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, my father was a thug during 90s
, but after Russia Correct article usage
the 90s
uplifted
its economy, he stopped violating the law and found a stable job that provided him enough money.
In conclusion, Verb problem
lifted
thiefs
Correct your spelling
thieves
commit
crimes after being punished are usually from countries with large Correct pronoun usage
who commit
economical
issues and unless those issues are solved and the quality of life is uplifted, they will continue breaking regulations.Correct word choice
economic
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Terminology Consistency
Ensure consistency in terminology to maintain formality and clarity. For instance, choose 'criminals' instead of alternating between 'outlaws', 'lawbreakers', and 'thugs'.
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Task Response
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