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The system used for rubbish/ garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter - describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly - explain how this is affecting you and you neighbours - suggest what should be done about the problem Write at least 150 words You do NOT need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear Sir or Madam,

#system #rubbish #garbage #collection #area #neighbours #council #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my displeasure with
garbage
 collectors. My first problem is the
garbage
 collectors don't work at all our streets are full of
garbage
 and the air is dirty it would be nice if they
come
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came
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 at least twice a week.
Also
, if there is a lot of waste, the air will
be pollutes
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be polluted
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 and the health of the population will lost.
In addition
, it leads to the increase of all kinds
bad
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of bad
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 insects, which later
has
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have
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 bad consequences We will appeal to the government with our blood
neighbor
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neighbour
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 to
sent
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send
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 us
garbage
 collectors and we will pay them and send additional referral workers
please
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, please
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 to resolve the problem I would appreciate it if you could Yours Faithfully Toshmatov Afrosiyob
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure your ideas are clearly structured and flow logically from one paragraph to the next. This will help make your letter more cohesive and easier to follow.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the problems you and your neighbors are facing and how they affect your daily life. This will help strengthen your argument and make your case more compelling.
task achievement
Your letter's tone is somewhat informal and abrupt in places. Remember to maintain a polite and respectful tone throughout, even when expressing frustration or dissatisfaction.
content
You've clearly communicated the main problem regarding the garbage collection issue in your local area.
proposal
You managed to propose a solution to the problem, which is an important element of the task.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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