You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian males with a job in three different
age
categories in 1984,2001 and 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen that the rate of working men from
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age
groupe remaind
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group remained
steady and was the highest one among the others in all years. Another significant point is that In 1984, approximately 57
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of the 15-19 years old men had a job
while
this
rate was around 90%
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for the
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group
then
these rates
leved
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out until 2001. Though the percentage of the youngest
age
category
droped
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dropped
to 50% in 2014, the latter had no specific change.
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period the 60-64
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group
had the smallest
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proportion
in comparison with others at about 34% and
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off at the same rate in 2001
then
it reached a peak at 57% in 2014.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • age groups
  • significant changes
  • employment rates
  • economic shifts
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • policy-making
  • workforce participation
  • labor market dynamics
  • demographic shifts
  • career longevity
  • early retirement
  • job market competitiveness
  • technological unemployment
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