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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comaprisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comaprisions where relevant.
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This
 pie and table shows information on the police budget and shows how the
money
 was spent between 2017 to 2018 in an area of
britain
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Britain
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.
Overall
, what stands out is that there was 69
precentage
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per cent
 of
money
 spent
for
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on
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 buildings and transport and in
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the table
a table
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table
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table,
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 the first place
at
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as
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source
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a source
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 of
budget
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the budget
a budget
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 is
National
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the National
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Governmet
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Government
 with 175.5m and the
last
of
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apply
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place is other sources with 38m in 2017. In
term
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terms
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 of budget ,
National
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the National
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 government started at 175.5m in 2017 and
finish
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finished
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 at 177.8 in 2018,
that
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which
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 is
most
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the most
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 number of
other source
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another source
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, in
second
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the second
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 level is Local Taxes
is rise
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is risen
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almost
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by almost
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 10
m
 in couple
years
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of years
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 . In
pie
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pie,
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 there was stable for buildings and transport
while
money
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the money
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of
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for
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 technology was 8% in 2017 but
in2018
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in 2018
 it was dramatical rise to 14% .salaries
is
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are
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most
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the most
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 amount of
money
that
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apply
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spent and it was 75% in 2017 and it decreased to 69% in 2018.and in the end buildings and transport
staied
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stayed
 at 17% in 2 years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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