The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.
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quantity
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of natives of several languages in Canada in 1980 and 1990.
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overall
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, it can be seen that the amount of local citizens of other languages stayed the same in both years
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Urdu,
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and Chinese
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users
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increased.
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, English speakers decreased rather
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indicators. Issues related to the pie charts that the proportion of
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of other languages did not change (6%). Other cases with Chinese and Urdu have minor progressions. To be
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, Urdu
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number grew up from 15% to 28% whilst Chinese
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descendants
experienced a moderate growth from 9% to 11%. Turning to the largest part of
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in 1980 were more individuals (70%) who had English as a mother tongue, but in
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decade
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became (55%)
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of
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percent.
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language was the most popular type of conversion in Canada.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • native speakers
  • pie chart
  • number
  • different languages
  • Canada
  • 1996
  • 2006
  • 2016
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • majority
  • minority
  • significant
  • notable
  • significant
  • share
  • dominant
  • diverse
  • linguistic landscape
  • shift
  • evolution
  • data
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • graphical representation
  • pattern
  • change
  • fluctuation
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