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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given Pictures depict the
overall
 distribution of
water
 in terms of three different categories in six nations .
Overall
, as can be seen from the graphs
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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, North
America
 and Europe are the
one
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ones
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,
whice
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which
 are not using
major
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a major
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 part of
water
 in
agricuture
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agriculture
agricultural
 use as
compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to Others. The most
eyecatching
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eye-catching
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 Point
that is
, South East
Asia
, Central
Asia
 and Africa are the nations which are using
highest
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the highest
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 Proportion of
water
 by above 80% which are 81%, 88% and 84%.
However
, South
America
also
spend
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spent
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 above 70% but less as
compare
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compared
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 to
that
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the
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 three countries.
Whereas
 South
America
 has the highest contribution of
water
 in
domestic
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the domestic
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 area followed by Europe
,
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apply
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 and North
America
.
According to
chart
Correct article usage
the chart
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,
highly
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a highly
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noteable
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notable
noticeable
 Point
that is
, Europe
as well as
 North
America
 are spending around 50% of
water
in
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on
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 industrial use among all the nations.
In
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apply
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Africa, Central
Asia
 ,and South East
Asia
 have less than 10% in terms of domestic use of
water
 by 9%, 7%,
7
Correct word choice
and 7
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%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, that is".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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