The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by
The first illustration depicts how a normal Australian household
use
Change the verb form
uses
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
energy
. The second graph illustrates how this
energy
use
affected greenhouse gas
emissions
. An overall
examination indicates that heating spends the most amount of energy
but it is not the most influencial
task.
As mentioned, heating provides 42% of the total 100%, Correct your spelling
influential
However
it only takes up 15% of Add a comma
However,
emissions
. Water heating comes second with 30% use
, and only goes up by 2% on the other chart. refrigeration holds 7% but suprisingly
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surprisingly
this
amount doubles on
the greenhouse Change preposition
apply
gas
emissions
. The data being
similar in lighting sources of 4% turning into 8%. The lowest consumption of Wrong verb form
is
energy
belongs to cooling with a mere 2% share and 3% on the
Correct article usage
apply
gas
emissions
. The rest of the 100%, Other appliance energy
use
only makes up 15%, yet this
amount almost gets twice as much in the australian
Change the capitalization
Australian
households
green Change noun form
households'
household's
gas
emissions
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