The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Charts indicate the influence of average temperatures on the swimming suit purchase in
the
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New York
city
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per month. The data are presented in between 6
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starting from January 2012.
Overall
, we can see that the temperature does not impact the purchasing power.
To begin
with,
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chart presents the significant
grow
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of interest in bathing products that in April reached almost $300 hundred thousand.
After
this
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the
sale
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sales
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decreased rapidly. In just two months the revenue was more than $250 hundred thousand less
compairing
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comparing
June to April.
However
, the line chart shows that after
slight
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a slight
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downturn from January until February, the average temperature was constantly increasing. It was growing from 5 to 10 degrees every month. It clearly illustrates that temperature and bath goods demand were not linked in the first 6 months of the year 2012.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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