Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
In modern times, purchasing
food
has become the trend that more people
prefer over cooking at home. The time-consumption
and no cooking skills Correct your spelling
time consumption
require
for some cuisines are Change the form of the verb
required
the
beneficial Change the article
apply
from
purchasing Change preposition
for
food
but there are also
downsides to be taken into consideration.
Firstly
, one benefit of purchasing food
is time-consumption
. By purchasing Correct your spelling
time consumption
food
, it enables working
class to grab a quick meal as they are rushing through their day and don’t have much time left for cooking. Correct article usage
the working
Secondly
, purchasing food
is advantages
because they can buy any cuisine that they want to eat without requiring cooking skills. Replace the word
advantageous
For example
, people
in Australia may want to experience Thai cuisine, so they can easily access to
it by ordering from a restaurant.
Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, one problem when people
choose purchasing
Change the verb form
to purchase
food
is we
cannot select the ingredients, which can affect our ability to control dietary Correct pronoun usage
they
program
and Fix the agreement mistake
programs
healthy
issues. Replace the word
health
For instance
, some people
have medical prescription
for using certain types of cooking oil. Another possible issue is that the hygiene process for purchasing Fix the agreement mistake
prescriptions
food
is questionable, we cannot ensure the processes and tools used for processing the food
are hygienic and meet regulatory standards.
In a nutshell, while
purchasing food
offers benefits such
as convenience to people
, it also
can raise concerns related to healthy
Replace the word
health
issue
and hygiene Fix the agreement mistake
issues
process
.Fix the agreement mistake
processes
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